Intriguing. A truck hits your bike. But the real drama lies in your relationship, and the way you communicate the facts and feelings of a truck hitting your bike.
Do you really think they break up? That certainly wasn't my interpretation. I do see a type of tension that is very relateable. He has an upsetting experience, but doesn't want to be upset. He resists being angry. He also doesn't want anyone to be upset *at* him, to believe he didn't react in the *correct* way, that he didn't do what he should. He is so sure his girlfriend is judging him that he blames her for his change in mood after they interact. He examines many relationships in his life, the kind of person he is, his girlfriend are, his parents are, while also contemplating how to fix his bike. He and his girlfriend talk and also seek resolution.
I couldn't find any change in the protagonist. Two events occur: a truck strikes and damages the rear wheel of his bicycle, and later he breaks up with his girlfriend. Where are the stakes? I see almost no tension. What does the protagonist want? His girlfriend want? I don't see it on the page. He wants to fix his bicycle, good. Maybe I'm built too low to the ground, because it all went over my head.
Intriguing. A truck hits your bike. But the real drama lies in your relationship, and the way you communicate the facts and feelings of a truck hitting your bike.
most impressive is that cover image
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incredible. gonna spend a long time looking at these.
Do you really think they break up? That certainly wasn't my interpretation. I do see a type of tension that is very relateable. He has an upsetting experience, but doesn't want to be upset. He resists being angry. He also doesn't want anyone to be upset *at* him, to believe he didn't react in the *correct* way, that he didn't do what he should. He is so sure his girlfriend is judging him that he blames her for his change in mood after they interact. He examines many relationships in his life, the kind of person he is, his girlfriend are, his parents are, while also contemplating how to fix his bike. He and his girlfriend talk and also seek resolution.
So good, always so good. I love everything Tao Lin writes.
I enjoyed reading this and appreciate getting posts from you 👍🚲
trap out the bando
I couldn't find any change in the protagonist. Two events occur: a truck strikes and damages the rear wheel of his bicycle, and later he breaks up with his girlfriend. Where are the stakes? I see almost no tension. What does the protagonist want? His girlfriend want? I don't see it on the page. He wants to fix his bicycle, good. Maybe I'm built too low to the ground, because it all went over my head.
It's all there, Tim. It's just impressively, incredibly subtle. :)
Like it a lot.
Enjoyed this! Keep up the good work, Tao.